Heya, glad you guys liked it and I appreciate that you looked at the story on a deeper level, given the genre that it's written in. i think the revamp will be more consistent but you're absolutely right. when i started this i had no writing experience at all you the quality of the story does develop with zack so you kinda get to watch both of us grow in real time. there's a ton of meta references in it and that was an overarching theme throughout. i wanted something that was in the adult genre that actually confronted the genre. also, glad you liked the ending. i was terrified and i agree, good stories can have terrible endings and ruin everything and i was super invested in trying to make this right. i am proud of it. it's not perfect but it's a first draft at something that i've never done before and i literally put my soul into it and i'm humbled that people have received it well and it's made such a difference to people <3