I think the scroll bars are turned off so the longer text gets cut off and there's no way to see the options underneath (the Monopoly page and the apology for example) which is a little disappointing because this is SO brilliant. I think you could break the party up into smaller moments, and use them to show some of the patterns in the different characters that Autumn brings up in the text a little more under the radar. It might be interesting to see the characters spread out and the narrator kinda going from room to room interacting with people and catching snippets of conversations that might tie back into the fight, either directly or just as deeper context, once everyone is back in the same place.