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That's exactly why i feeled something "wrong" when played your VN. It's your "film principles", it's closer to film then to novel. But film at least has 120 image per second, that is not something you can achieve in VN (for now). In film charapters described via their actions & words and how well the actors can "act" them. You can actually "see" it via record with bunch of frame, big actor work and montage. When creating VN you have to bring to live the puppets via their description, appearence, their thought, their respective to the world, how they see each other, their relationship and principles. It's only can be done via TEXT and you chose to get rid from most of it. You simple can't do that even with 1000 images over scene, no matter how good the graphic is (maybe in future it can be done, but for now we live in 21 century), that why it's at first Novel and only then Visual Novel afterwards. You need to describe their actions EVEN if it's show up on image, coz they are not actors they can't "act" to show their character, but only a puppet, they are not acting roles, but perfom actions that you describe.

SPOILER. 

For example we can take the first actualy scene, when Euryale met slaver and his slave. There is no description about what happen with slaver after what Euryale done with him, god there is no even description about why and how she do that, we can only imagine. Did he bleed to death after he pass out? Did he die immediately from pain shock? Did he pass out and survive some how? There is only one image with zero text and that all, he not even scream. If follow "film principles" there must be long scene with his scream and agony from pain, maybe some last words from typpical clishe villian, mb some epic phrase from MC. But no, there is no such scene. Thats don't feel "live" or "real", only some doll do something with other doll. BUT if you putt in that scene not so much words, it's all starts make sence, like - "Euryale tore off his balls from body, because he was filty scum and slaver. The man did not even understand what happened to him. He pass out from pain shock and die not long afterwards. Satisfied, Euryale stand over him and starts walking towards the man's former property". And thats all. All make sence, it feels like "living scene", not some one image with a lot of question afterward. You're not making a film here, you create a tale with pictures, hold your horses, the techology is not that advanced for now.