good luck with your project! some constructive criticism is that you are competing against games that have 2d or 3d renders. i always find that using real photos takes away from the overall experience since you cant design exactly what you as a creator want. also its hard to compete with games made in renpy/unity/rpg maker with an html game.
i only played a little bit since im not a fan of html games or sourced photos but your english writing is already way better than so many games that are good so dont worry about that until later.
as i said, good luck! you will definitely get better at the whole process with time and effort!