well i'm trusting caribdis to look into this a bit more, because they are really good at writing!
The majority of the time the writing is well-done. No lie. Comedy wise, he's unmatched on ITCH. But when it comes to the women dialogue in sex, they act like porn-stars. And I honestly can't see that as who they are. Not even Alex or Nancy. I get it, it's a hentai visual novel. But you can have sex and keep it in character. Or is Caribdis' point with them acting like that, is that that is who they really are? Are they always holding back and pretending to be someone else, but when they jump in bed, they're just thirsty for sex and nothing else? I hope that's not the case. At least not for Luna and Annie. The only person I would buy that would be Calypso, since greek gods are often times said to be into everything including hedonism.