Such a lovely game! Narration and sound design are on point. Illustrations are building very good atmospheric foundation along with mentioned sound, and music! I really like how you wrapped everything together.
With that said choose what you describe, and what you want to show with Illustration. By that I mean that you don't have to "tell" everything with the text, you can show it. Example would be: Player comes to the Girl's house, we can see that glass is shattered. There is no need to tell that with text box.
I cant wait for the third part!
Cheers ! Keep going with such a cool project!