If its writing, though im no experts, I think there could have been some intro for the characters. Can be some backstory, some traits, anything to help the player relate to or remember with (also visual wise). The story was basically too abrupt for me, so I was basically spamming the next button.
Personally for me, for audio and visuals, it feels as if theres no consistency (cartoon style in dialogue, creepypasta in the back, cheerful music, and weird jokes from banana). Although there is a style where different style mixed together to create unique experience, its kinda hard to pull off. If its intentional then nice that you tried making it work.