I must say... This one is by far one of the visual novels that really rooked me most. i'm a bit surprised with the quality of writing and storytelling. although you ond go way to far from common cliches, wich is not a problem let me be very clear, you present them well and without boring the reader
One thing that I must ask of you, if you can, is to be careful to create a good amount of tension on your story. thats something that I see many creators struggle with. Either they don't create enough tension, that make the story good and compeling, But not boring. or they do that in some forcefull way that annoys more than engage the reader.
Nevertheless, I have high expectations with this VN. Kudos for you.