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Thank you so much for this thoughtful and detailed feedback! I think I know what you mean about Alan's face. There's a few times, especially when he's stripping but before he's fully naked, that his mouth and eyes look unnatural.

Regarding story; I know what you mean. Part of what makes a VN so hot is the interplay between story and image. You develop an investment in the characters and then when they get busy it's even more sexy. That said, I'm not sure how much story this particular game will have. I'm not saying no, I'm just not sure yet. Part of why I chose to do this as my first game was because it doesn't really have a story and I felt it would allow me to better learn the software (Ren'Py/Daz) without getting too hung up on other stuff. 

I definitely plan on doing more story-driven projects in future. I also plan on using some of these characters in other stories where their roles will have more of an impact on the plot. And that said, I'm still not saying no to adding story details in this project, I'm just not sure yet.

Again, thanks so much for the feedback :D 

Okay, I played the demo again and I can stated that the main problem with Alan face, besides some strange expressions, is the eyes. Same with Elie's model picture here. Their eyes are kinda alien, I don't know. I think changing them for a more ordinary color, will help a lot. And also, if you're redoing Alan's model, maybe you could increase his tits size? He has already a big butt, but I believe in MAN BOOB supremacy, haha.

I believe in MAN BOOB supremacy

And, in regarding of the story, I thought of two options:

If you want a simple story: the MC gets inform of this "Casino" (or something) that, for money, you can play in 1on1 session with some guy, that works there, and if you win, you receive a special treatment, like a happy-ending massage, sorta. And after that, you can go on dates and develop your relationship with him.

If you want a longer/complex story: in this scenario, the MC is informed of a Tournament of Blackjack. So, you have your first encounter with Alan, and if you win, you face the next character (Dean, for example). As the days go by within each match, you get the chance to meet and develop your relationship with the guys you win matches against. There may also be a point system; let me explain my idea: you date, and if you answer correctly, you earn points. But also, you can replay the match with the guy in the same scenario, and see the same sex scene again, to earn more points. And when you earn enough points, you can play another match, in another setting, with different dialogue and a different sex scene, further developing your relationship.

I don't know if I explain myself correctly, but I hope so. And if this helped you in any way, fantastic. Keep up the good work.

PD.: if you will add more characters in the future, I will love to see a guy that is like Olivine from Nu:Carnival: a chaste/priest character that is so kinky but is so repress that he can't accept his "dark side". Also, Olivine has big tits, a big butt and a very summisive personality, haha.