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I can say it’s a nice game after an hour of playing. It has a good pace and speed telling. There are so many characters… They look unique within the game. They may be hard to develop, but for now I don’t see any problems here.

That magic font looks cool, and I could see its translation on the History page. There are characters and events pages, but they were somehow hard to find. Could you add icons of these windows to the main story window? You know, heart and scroll/book icon.

You have to find some beta readers. The game has too many errors. They aren’t so critical, but numerous. Wrong letters in some words, too low-quality punctuation or its absence, and letters in upper and low cases (The main pretension is the word “I”. You should always write it like this “I”, but in 80% of cases it goes as “i”. There were these type problems with other words).

Thank you for playing and your suggestions. I'll have to look into making some extra ways to the event screens other than the quick menu. I know about the grammar Issues and have been working to fix all of them. When they're fixed reading should be a much better experience.

I can suggest these browser extensions “Grammarly” and “Grammar Checker and Text Rewriter — Linguix”. They help me a lot with writing texts. Although they are only for internet browsers.

Another issue I forgot to mention is the game size. It has 2 Gb, it’s too much for version 0.01. Try to compress images and videos.

Grammarly can be added as an addon to Microsoft Word or you can use their webapp via browser.