This is a fascinating way of storytelling. The ability to go "out" of the main path and see the stuff on the sides, usually about unparseable ambience or of peeks of a strange entity, really give that entity a feel of presence. There is what is literally happening to this girl, i.e she sees things happen, and then there's all this feeling and vibe and presence of the odd reality around her. I really enjoyed what you were able to do with this, definitely memorable in such a short amount of time!