This game was quite interesting, to say the least. I have to say, after completely finishing all of the routes, I'm left slightly confused, though this game (being a demo as it is) does have its high points. Since it isn't complete, I thought I would take the time to make some critiques:
**Spoilers from this point**
First off, I did notice some minor grammar mistakes such as words repeated in sentences and a few misspellings. Not so much as to render the text annoying to read, but I thought I'd point it out nonetheless.
My biggest criticism would be the storyline itself. I felt there were a lot of things going on at once and it made it difficult to follow. Ishida's death was very abrupt with little foreshadowing (Though, this may be intentional), and up until this point, I felt his character and his personality weren't very touched on, leading me to feel a bit apathetic over what I assume was supposed to be a sad moment.
I also felt like the creepy moments in the game Chiharu borrows, Otome Legends, were a bit of an afterthought and could have been more integrated to truly give it an unnerving feel since I assume it is going to be a large plot point later on.
All in all, I believe it could be vastly improved by cutting down on some of the unnecessary character information and instead focusing on more foreshadowing for the dark twists that occur later on.
Some of the more positive things I enjoyed about the game:
The Otome Legends game Chiharu plays was unexpected and humorous to read through. The notes from the developer (though surprising to find, in a game of this genre) were also enjoyable.
I will definitely be sticking around for the full version to see how the story progresses, and to see if any changes end up being made.