Very, very evocative. The journaling approach gives the story an immediacy that really drew me in. That was very well done!
The prose and flow of the story could have been much better with some attention to punctuation, spelling, and grammar. Done carefully, you could probably get away with some of that in the name of a "journal", but it was very distracting.
Good twist at the end, though--I didn't see that coming, and it really drove the nail in at the finish!