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Your 'constructive' criticism derailed quite fast there. Especially since you try to paint a very subjective problem you have as an objective flaw. 

I do not see anything inherently wrong in the MCs interaction with Elsa. You thinking the natural thing for her should be to tell him off isn't really proof for a fault on the writers part. Rather it tells me that you lack life experience in this regard (which is a good thing for you I guess). People in as dire a mental state as Elsa tend to feel when someone they are talking to 'knows what it is like'. So her not pushing the MC back here is absolutely on point. 

Since you are keen on giving advice, here is mine for you. Self reflection. Instead of assuming everyone does things the wrong way or 'doesn't get it' maybe leave room for the possibility that it is you that can learn something new. 

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