Just leaving my thoughts here now that I've gotten to this:
- Great art! It's all very dynamic and visually interesting, it really adds to the exaggerated atmosphere. It helps the humorous but with the possibility of seriousness get through.
- Soundtracks p good too. Nice choices.
- I like the setting. After PLvAA, I've always been hankering for more of a murder mystery/fantasy mash-up, and this doesn't disappoint.
- The characters are all very lively, and I felt attached to them by the end. With the exception of maybe David, but I get the impression he's supposed to feel distant. Froyo's a fave.
- Along with that, all the character designs are appealing and interesting.
- The backgrounds, for the most part, are very nice!
- After the first investigation starts, it does start to feel very obviously rushed. I think this is a by-product of your structure. Rapid-fire mystery solving sounds neat on paper, but it also misses what makes cases so satisfying, that they're sort of long journeys towards a solution with many twists and turns. I think, if you ever update this, I'd say choose one of your mysteries, and expand upon it and just make one longer investigation, and integrate the character interactions more into that.
- The third investigation was a bit painful. I understand the need to just get something out, but I was seriously straining my eyes looking for something I may have missed. Plus some graphical glitches (the image shifted each time I clicked on something) heavily took me out of it, which is especially problematic considering the image used is a still from Harry Potter, which is already fairly jarring, considering the backgrounds before it.
- The character development with Froyo and Pichu does feel a little phoned in and jarring. I like them being on more friendly terms, but Froyo lets her guard down a little too easy for my taste, especially after they spent most of the game berating each other.
- This one is a bit more personal preference, but I'd suggest having a penalty system should you decide to expand on this more. Being able to brute-force solutions does take out a lot of the satisfaction of solving a mystery.
Not really negatives, but not really positives either:
- I think Froyo and Pichu could do with being a tad bit taller, because you can't really see their character art underneath the textboxes. Which is sad, because it is really good art!
- I giggled, but the Alexa jokes should probably be a bit less specific. Referencing Alexa specifically sort of dates your work, and so does "Dank Memes," which I suppose the latter is the point, but I did have an impulse to roll my eyes when I saw the word "dank." It reminded me of the weird dumb dudebros in my highschool.
Very very good, I had a blast playing through it, and I'm really interested in what else you have to offer! I'll post a reply to this later on to link you to the posts boosting all the submissions, along with less specific thoughts, later. It makes me very happy to see such high quality work be submitted.