CW: // Contains Spoilers
Something about the story's narrative voice just bores me and I find that it doesn't become as immersive later on into the story. I don't think the problem inherently lies in the 2nd POV, but rather how the voice shows the details in the story. In short, there is A LOT of 'telling' than 'showing'.
I find the lack of actions in between pieces of dialogue troublesome... and blank-ish for the lack of a better word.
Katan as a protagonist... he seems to be quite dichotomic as a character, but I digress.
That doesn't necessarily mean that I don't like the VN. I'he had quite the enjoyable experienc for the most part.
Edit: Actually I find the characterization of Ramos to sometimes not really make sense. At some point, I recall Katan saying that he plans to pawn off the sword his uncle and aunt gave him for money, but when Ramos asked to sell it, he's hesitant all of a sudden.
I also find that he's quite ignorant for a prince. Somehow, he barely knows anything about Farhoron. Isn't he supposed to at least know more about it than stories because he is taught all these sorts of things, otherwise he wouldn't really be a good prince, would he?
There were also some character inconsistencies like when Ramos declined some stuff such as sleeping in Renee's old child's bed because he didn't want to be indebted. I found it weird because he was the same person who didn't hesitate to take the money and find the booze.
There were also some errors in grammar, sometimes. This becomes further evident later into the story. While they aren't to the point that the text no longer becomes understandable, I find them to be a bother to my pedantic self.