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Fantasy World

A new take on a classic idea, Fantasy World is roleplaying Powered by the Apocalypse for the 2020s. · By Alessandro Piroddi

Typos

A topic by Alex Leone created Jul 01, 2021 Views: 288 Replies: 25
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This is a place to post typos or suggestions for the Google Site version of Fantasy World.

Alessandro, if you have a place you’d rather people report these, let me know and you can delete this thread! :)

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Here: “Each Type of Agent is then put into focus by selecting one out of six available Subtypes that are specific of each different Type.”

“of” should be “to”

Developer(+1)

Hi Alex!
Nice to have you here :D

Go on and report any typos you find. We are giving the text a good editing pass to prep it for the PDF version and the new wiki alike, so any help is welcome :)

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Just a suggestion (for Clarity): Under the Landscape Agent impulses, I’d change the “Prison” impulse to “to contain and deny escape.” I had to look up the word “egress.” It’s a pretty word, but I don’t think it’s a commonly-known word.

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Also, I’m not sure how the text will be formatted on that page, but saying something like “impulse: to [impulse goes here]” might increase clarity as well. Without the colon, it doesn’t really create a full sentence. That’s more of an editor thing, I guess.

Developer

I'm not sure I get what you mean here ^_^'

I edited my comment for clarity. All I meant was: I think there should be a colon after the word “impulse” in that section.

Does that clarify what I mean at all? Or, what questions do you still have?

Developer(+1)

Aaaah, I get it now! :D

Noted :)

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In the Look Around move:

clarify how you act to get extra info and to what you pay close attention to

should be:

clarify how you act to get extra info and what you pay close attention to

There’s an extra “to” in there.

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In Class Moves:

There’s an unfinished sentence: “But at the same time all Starting Moves”

It can probably just be removed? It seems like you’ve said enough about Starting Moves on this page.

Developer

Can't find it in the new text, so I guess it was already fixed :D

Perfect! :D

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On The Knight’s Voice of Authority move:

“knightley” should be “knightly”

Developer

Fixed :)

On the Occultist’s Earth’s Veins:

“lay line” should be “ley line”

Developer

fixed :D

On the Priest’s Guidance:

listen to your heart an pick one:

should be

listen to your heart and pick one:

Developer

fixed :)

On the Priest’s Messiah:

You are a charismatic leader among the those that believe in your deity

should be

You are a charismatic leader among those that believe in your deity

Developer

fixed :)

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On the Scoundrel’s Underworld Network:

KNIWING

should be

KNOWING

Developer(+1)

Fixed :)

On the Wildcaller’s Born of the Soil:

describe how your call looks like

should be

describe what your call looks like

Developer

Fixed :)

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On Protagonist Creation Final Details

"Assign the following ratings to your six Stats-1 +0 +1 +2"

Should be  four stats
It might be helpful to add a link to the Stats description in Rolling Dice

Developer(+1)

Thanks.
Fixed in the (upcoming) revised text :)