I like the contents of this move, but, like “Journey,” following it is confusing. At the very least, I would need a cheat sheet to understand what I’m supposed to do. Ideally, it would be clear all on its own.
Here are some specific things I think would make this move clearer:
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“each Player goes through all the steps and substeps”: remove “and substeps”. There isn’t really anything labeled a “substep,” just options within each step.
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I’m not sure that I like the “Grow Up” mechanic. The only way that it’s different from “marking future growth after marking 5 growth” is that you can be anywhere on the growth track and still get a future growth. Basically, “Growing Up” means “get a variable amount of Growth.” It incentivizes resolving your Issue and mastering your Doubt when you have very little Growth (no matter how much Future Growth you have), which seems like a really weird, complicated thing to consider at all. I’d much rather have the Grow Up options simply give you something like 3 Growth. Come to think of it, without the Grow Up mechanic as written, I’m not sure what the point of Future Growth is at all. Perhaps it could also be simplified and each character could just have Growth. It doesn’t seem like the complexity of Grow Up and Future Growth buys us anything interesting.
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I’d change “Step 1) Considering your PC’s Issue…” and “Step 2) Considering your PC’s Doubt…” to “Consider” in both cases, to match Step 3. “Consider” is an active verb (and an imperative!), so stronger and clearer in this case.
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In Step 4: Remove the sentence “You can do this only once per session.” This is unnecessary: the trigger of the move ensures that this only happens once per session, at the end of the session. This sentence implies that you can do Step 4 at other times in the game, which I don’t think is correct.
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“Skip” is unintuitive. I understand why it’s there, mechanically, it just feels awkward to go through those options in order and then skip, like, one or two options usually when I hit a Skip. In practice, when I read the options below each step, I’m skimming them, not taking order into account.
For the steps that include “Skip,” options, I’d change up the step text kind of like this (in step 1, for example):
Step 1) Consider your PC’s Issue…
If you took action to meaningfully address it, say how and mark growth. Otherwise, if you feel it’s resolved, explain how, then Renew it and mark 3 growth. Otherwise, if you want to abandon it say why, then Renew it and mark 3 growth. Otherwise, if you want to reword or slightly revise it, say why and how, and do so freely.
If I’ve fundamentally misunderstood any part of the move above, let me know so I can correct my understanding! Really, my main feedback is: the move is confusing, hard to follow, and hard to understand. What’s above are just my suggestions for some ways to “fix” it.
Thanks! :)