Couple of things I noticed in the text that you might want to have a look at. Apologies for wasting your time if you have already fixed them.
Tiffany "Okay, I will you tell the story about how I met your father." should be "...tell you..."
Tiffany "I immediately started busting up in laughter. I've never heard anyone talk to their car like that." should be "...I'd never..."
MC "(I know she's a cool landyland thats not easily embarrassed, but still.)" should be "...cool landlady..."
Krystal "Last week, my friend Daphne and I landed on a movie about musical instruments that kill people, i think it was supposed to be a horror movie but laughed the entire time." should be "...we laughed..."
MC "(This doesn't make sense. If he's not at New Angeles University, he should be worker there.)" should be "...a worker..." or "...working..."
MC to Khloe & Jenny "Well, if it's to help Jenny out, I might be about to help." should be ",,,be willing to..." or "...be able to..."
Jenny "I'm want to do it again, but this time I want you to push my head Khloe." should be "I want..."
MC "(I have a couple of dollars left, so maybe I can grabe a snack and head to park until she gets out of class.)" should be "...head to the..."
Tiffany "I even called the police, but they wouldn't do anything because the person missing has to be gone for at least twenty-four hours before they will file a missings person report."shoudl be "...missing persons..."
Skylar "Your so deep, and it's so good!" should be "You're so..."
Krystal "*Sign* The frozen one worked, ..." should be "*Sigh*..."
MC "After kissing, the next thing you want to do is move to the neck and give soft and gently kisses like this..." should be "...gentle kisses..."
MC "She got bullied when she younger and sometimes still does. That's the last thing I need is for you to do the same." should be "...she was younger..." and "...does. The last..."
MC "(Okay, Daphne definitely wants hop on my pogo stick..." should be "... wants to hop..."
Looking forward to the next release.