Thank you so much, this was very helpful! Elizabeth's dialogue on the demo doesn't give her much justice to be honest, in following chapters I believe she will become much more interesting. You're right about the "modern" dialogue, I must confess during the traslation (the original text was written in italian) I probably exaggerated with it. We'll definitely do a style check when the full text will be ready.
Anyway I'll share these suggestions with our team, they'll definitely help us to shape our idea in the best possible way for the commercial version!