It a good start to a RPG or a visual novel, but I think your writing lacks direction. The main character and their friend don't sound like friends nor do they sound like they're in the same space when speaking. I'd recommend going back and tweaking some of the dialogue because it sounds like the two characters are two roommates having a falling out, rather then two best friends parting ways. Side note, the player seems to have inner thoughts that contradict each other, which I understand is to create a more complex character and to have more complex paths in your game, but it makes your character come across as unlikeable. Overall its a solid start to your game and the coding and background looks great, I'd just go back and tweak your characters and some of the writing.