Hey! You did a great job creating a particular atmosphere, and this piece really shows your twine prowess. I really like how it breaks into smaller poems that can be picked in any order, and you've some great one-liners ("They felt like you and i cried"). Nice work.
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Thank you! I've actually been thinking about this reply all week. I'm really an amateur at Twine to be honest and I wasn't really confident about my abilities as an IF game designer or a poet. But it looks like what I wrote had some kind of impact on you. I'm glad I risked being a little vulnerable.
I don't think I can capture the nuance of my last relationship and its dissolution in under 300 words. But I could only think of the night I returned to our old apartment alone, with a couple weeks left on the lease. How dark it was, since nearly all the lightbulbs were out. The stale, almost rancid air.
Maybe there'll be another one of these. Thanks for helping me consider it.