Nice stuff! I adored the worldbuilding, but like Alekai I want More. More little flavors, more options, more tidbits and bobs... Anything would be lovely.
I found Pan's real motive of being like "yo. follow this chick for a real long time :)" to be a bit vague. I may have glazed over it, but I couldn't really find a true motive for him!
It was short, but short and sweet; I liked how everything relevant was presented, although at the same time I would've liked some more person-on-person true interactions aside from quick resolutions. But for time's sake, I completely understand where you're from!
I liked it! Good stuff.