You did an amazing jobs with your maps. They look great! Your pacing is decent and the music feels eerie and adds to the atmosphere. The little "jumpscares" are well placed and your use of lighting is awesome. Also: The rapid movement of the swirly-face entity gave me chills!!!
I'd like to suggest that you add a pause to the constant breathing noise in the shadows, otherwise it gets annoying. I've also had the problem that one of the walkers was stuck in front of an exit which was pretty hard to solve without restarting.
Maybe you could use a name box for the characters instead? I constantly read the name of the character again because it showed in the first row of every dialoge, instead in a seperate name box.
Keep up the good work.