Great story-telling happening and love the colorful characterization of Scrup. Think about adding sounds! You’ve got a lot of good descriptions that could benefit from a few small sound snippets to bring them to life. Scrup sounds like a pretty interesting character with an interesting perspective and it makes me wonder about the game being told from Scrup’s point of view during the player’s choices so that the player can feel more immersed in being Scrup as opposed to just controlling where he goes. Really really like your characterizations and where you’re going with your storytelling and I’m looking forward to more and to seeing how you choose to incorporate illustrations!