If there is something I want to see in a story is well fleshed out characters and an original premise, and I'm glad that this story has both of them. The humor is also rather funny, if not dark on times.
Is it perfect? No, there some flaws there and there, the background while giving a good sense of atmosphere it makes the text hard to read at times, and we cannot forget that one typo that sneaks past production.
For your first game jam and solo project, I can say that you did a good job delivering a intriguing story and characters, and since this is a W.I.P, I'm excited to see what you will come out to expand this world you created.
Lastly, if there is something I would a tip for once you work on the full game is that any antagonists/"villains" should have a motivation behind their acts, it normally shouldn't be just "for the evulz!", unless it is an important character trait for it (example, the Joker) . However, this just my view and this is your work, not mine, so you are free to alter it whether you like.
Sorry for the long review, I just had to take it out of my chest. And good work! I give this game a 8/10 IGN points.