A few things have come up, so the next edit will be at a later date. I apologize for that, but it's outside my control. I've started to slowly work my way through the remaining prologue, but it's taking longer than expected. Purely grammatical edits are fast enough, but for style/rephrasing I need to dedicate more contemplation than I'm currently able to. I'm holding out to the next weekend/Friday.
I'm also grateful that you take critique and advice. You have an distinctive style that bears polishing - after some conscious practice it will be very interesting. Definitely double-check any and all my suggestions in case of doubt and/or rewrite my edits as you see fit.
On a parting note, I would like to say that to the best of my knowledge, Discord servers are incredibly prone to degenerating into a clique-like mess on the best of days. With NSFW added, it might collapse even sooner. So, my advice is to not, but if you do, vet your mods religiously.
TL;DR: life busy, edits later, discord is true to its name.