Oh, I love how the narration and dialogue flowed! Wonderful stuff here! Suddenly got nostalgic for Outlaw Star haha. I think the only suggestion I can give is to optimize how the dialogue box works even further? I noticed that because the font color for all text is the same and because Ava's sprite is almost always on the box to show her reactions, you can actually get a bit confused as to who's speaking at the moment if you don't glance at the names all the time. And that kept happening to me because the writing just really compelled me read it like how the scene would've played out in an action movie scene lol. Perhaps assign different font colors for each character? Or even just color the names only, to signal the reader's peripheral view that the speaker has changed? Either way, I'm really excited to see the rest of the story!