It's starts off so surreal yet full of tension, really captured my attention to the world and the creatures in it. The visuals are bright and vibrant like the story and the characters. My own thing is (and I'm a victim of this too) is that some of the beginning wording could be shortened or edited. So example: "He made for his phone, but saw the glass black, not even the clock in the screen saver, and figured out it was probably a bad choice to turn it on after all that water." I already understand that the phone is busted in the first 2 phrases, no need so many words. The last part of that sentence was great and I wish I got to it slightly sooner. Overall, great work!!