I just got done playing this and as a harsh critic, it's the best fucking vn I've ever played. Storywise. The art is fucking amazing and best of all, the cigarettes are drawn right. I like that the MC isn't just a characterless self insert of the player but actually is her own character. Not to mention, Miles' jealousy is hot asf. It didn't feel like typical jealousy shown in media but rather dangerous and lovesick. The character writing is perfect, don't change a thing. And I also ADORE that main menu feature where you can look at Miles and Adriens information and features. The aestethic of the game is so interesting, made me wish this games demo was a lot longer.
The only criticisms I have is that I sometimes skipped over the text on accident cuz the text flow was kind of confusing and I didn't know when to click. I'd make the text flow simpler and add a return button so the player can go back like in a lot of other vn's.
I feel like it'd be a better experience if the player had more choices in the game. I know it's only a demo, so that's just advice for the final game!
I'd also love a click and point feature where we could explore rooms on our own, similar to Big Bad Dogs.
But when all is said, I'm 100% taking this game as inspo for the game I'm planning on making. I absolutely love games that give me inspo for the aestethics and dialogue for mine. So thank you for making this sweetie, be proud of urself! I'm definitely gonna be here for the finished game. TYSM<3