I like narrative games that go for a certain mood. I think yours has a good concept, and a lot of potential, but it also needs some work.
Mainly I didn't feel the "slowing down" part. I was just doing chores before opening the business. I think you could have more dialogue, or better yet- a second character, to flesh out the story more. Since the theme is "stargazing" it could be a more important part of the plot too. Now that I think of it, you could even leave the gameplay the same. The second character would be the one who slows down, and finds time to look at the stars, while you do the busywork :)