A very solid little sequence with strong cursed Caribbean vibes that fit great for pirate borg! It was a little unclear at first that you just go through each sequence one by one, so might want to clarify it, though I think it might add to the dreamlike vibe if the middle sections were randomized if you are not going to have a map. The last page is also a bit hard to read to between the weathering over the text and the bright red background.
I do really like the cover too, if you could bring in some of those visuals into the later pages it would definitely help set the scene for the other dreamscapes!
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Thanks Scott. Yeah my intent was a point crawl at first but kinda ran out of time and room for a map.
I like the visual of the back, but agree it's rough for mechanics to be there. I think I'll make it just like a book blurb when I expand this out.
I think bringing in the visuals to the text would be cool, I tried with the amber section and couldn't get a good balance. But I'll definitely try again with more time.