Really thematic, definitely gets me keen to play HMtW! I love the writing, doom and honour and the nettle knight, really leans into the Arthurian and chivalric romance vibe, I could easily slot this into Mythic Bastionland or Pendragon too. The presentation is fun as well, the tables and text is all clear and a good size,If slightly compressed (but understandable due to the Jam constraints).
Vertical spacing between paragraphs feels slightly tight, with key number 6 standing out weirdly (but it is also the easiest to parse for me, but I might not be the best judge ;) ) I think you could refine the keys to be less verbose and earn back some breathing room.
The numbers on the map would benefit from being a different colour to stand out from the black of the map itself.
Overall great though, I really like this one!
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Thanks for the detailed review! I do know the formatting got pretty funky on the map page, especially in regards to paragraph spacing, which I sacrificed to allow the text to remain legibly sized, but it's definitely something I intend to redo in the expanded edition I am planning later.
You do bring up a great point in terms of map color! I think making the numbers green or something would help them stand out so I'll definitely do that. Most of my art experience is in black and white so I often forget that color can be a useful tool for clarity.