Your feedback is impeccable, this is exactly what I need to hear. This is my first ever game and visual novel, all my writing before hand has been in a more standard literary format. There's a lot for me to improve to as I learn more about writing and the unique aspects of this medium as a whole. Thank you so much for your time and while it may have been an amateur work, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Hopefully I can adapt other short stories in this setting to VN format with better results.