You are writing some excellent prose. I was enjoying the emotional complexity as I was reading. If you are interested, I do freelance game audio and specialize in the type of musical emotional complexity that gives a different meaning to how lyrics feel on their own. I haven't used Twine before, but from what I understand, musical layers can be faded in and out based on what happens in the story. That could provide some audible feedback to the decisions that players make. Just an idea. Reach out anytime. Keep up the great work!
Ryan McQuinn
Ryan at NeonDolphinMusic dot com