Wowie! This was a truly engrossing read.
The character writing is impeccable, and you set the scenes so vividly. All the pieces are set up to mesh together so perfectly; Larkin's family dynamic especially sticks out to me as especially deliciously well-written. I love the conflict between Larkin's upbringing as a killer and her desire to stray from that upbringing, and the conflict the things unpoken between her and Brooke brings up in their relationship.
I would love to have more ambient sounds; children playing on a schoolyard, the crackle of a campfire, birdsong.
The backgrounds you used are perfect, I'm impressed with how vivid this story felt.
I'm itching to read the final act!
