theres some really evocative stuff happening here.
i like how the prose drifts from diaries at summer camp to religious psychosis, i like the main character hearkening to uriah, while apparently torturing & confining the autistic baddie - and the descriptions of that we get are pretty slick. i like the background image, the darkening of it over time, and the main menu image as well.
i wouldve liked to see more in terms of sound, color, text effects to make this pop on the multimedia level, and i wouldve liked to see this story talk about why these things are happening, who these people are, since at times i feel a little lost in trying to interpret it.