this vn got me good, honestly wasnt my favorite i just dont think it was my type of vn tbh. finn pissed me off to no end, if he has no haters i am dead and buried. he abandoned his sister for hot men he met not only a week ago. i will aplaud the writer for making him consistent, consistently lowering the bar for everyone else around him. i cant fault the story for having strange pacing issues because it is still in deveplopment. i wish there was more foreshadowing for the eventual betrayal because it feels like it was an afterthought beyond their bodies. with the reveal that the very porny logic was them trying to seduce our incompetent idiot mc i wish the story would develop into a more serious story. i see alot of comments wanting the men to get a redemption arc but personally i want finn to have a major reality check. if i was writing this i would kill off riley, and i want it to be finns fault. i want his immaturity and disregard for the woman who kept him afloat for months to bite him in his ass. i want this arc of reality tearing down the perfectly contructed fiction the men had built to leave him with nothing. and for good measure i want the men to die or disspear, preferably i want them to be the new atagonists.
i know the review was harsh but it was mostly because of how much i despise finn <3