nicely written, but as someone else said 9 year old dont speak or act like that. Also im pretty frustrated with how every choice I make to try and distance myself, or like any "negative" choice the story just, refuses and pushes the story along as I act friendly with everyone. Which is weird considering these people either aided, or where happy my family was killed..
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okay so saying a story is fictional is not a good defense against bad writing fyi. also if the characters being badly written is taking away from the story, it kinda is actually a issue, and one multiple people have had
its fine if you like it, and its okay to critique things you like, in fact its better you do