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I’m really really intrigued by this story! I think my only real critique is that there’s a lot of terms and things being infodumped all at once (particularly towards the very start), which makes it confusing to follow at times. I had to reread some things several times to make sure I got it all. But, regardless, I found it all super interesting, and the character dynamics portrayed are super fun. I’m already hooked and will definitely keep reading if/when you decide to release more of it. ^_^

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Thank you so much, I'm glad you found it interesting! and your critique was spot on, I'm realizing now a lot of terms I used probably only makes sense in my head X) I'll keep your critique in mind as I write and do a more thorough edit of my story.