I cannot believe that there aren't as many comments as I expected, the artstyle is eye-catching so I assumed that there would be more reviews. I loved the animations, it's hard to believe that this is someone's frist game after seeing the dedication.
As for the script, there are indeed some mistakes. Most of them are just simple mistakes, like the missuse of a dot or capitals, but here's what I thought that could be re-phrased (I want to clarify that I'm also not sure if what I'm saying is correct or not, since English is also not my first language).
Since the same words are repeated later you could use another adjetive, such as "blunt". I'm not sure if a translator would offer you different adjetives, but checking out an urban dictionary could help.
I think it's more fitting to say:
"There's something with the way he said my name. It made a cold sweat run down my back, not even the freezing wind from outside can make it dissappear"
"He said that like it was the most normal/common thing in the world."
I'm only pointing these out since you requested it on the game's desc. I think that the game is properly made, hopefully you don't give up and continue it.