Great story, great art, my notes are all regarding the gameplay...
I highly recommend you search a bit about testing and analysing your testing results + a little bit of game design principles
The game was so fun (when I saw you playing it) but as an actual user idk, why would I commit to finish it?
it is okay to make games *you enjoy* but if you seek the joy of others as well, make sure you consider their opinion
just a little bit tweaking and this will be a Steam game material !!
And I need to say THIS LOOKS LIKE IT TOOK AN INSANE AMOUNT OF WORK 0_0