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Firstly, thank you so much for creating a solo supplement! 💕

Now, typos:

Pg5: 

"card decks cannot answer be used for everything" (I assume you'd want to remove the "answer" here);

Also, and this just might be confusion or nitpicking on my end, but the * next to that section heading makes it seem like there should/would be some kind of corresponding footnote?

(This one is small, and happens with most bulleted lists, not just the one on pg5.) The bulleted list items inconsistently end with and without periods.

Pg8:

"Depending on the [context], certain actions could have multiple behavior types, like a GRAPPLE versus a smaller or reaction-based character being treated as [an] Interfere behavior type due to inflicting IMMOBILIZED and/or denying reactions."

"Alternatively[add a "," remove "while"] a GRAPPLE to pull a character off [optional "of" added] a Control Zone or away from a vulnerable ally [would be] treated as an Assist behavior type."

*This paragraph might benefit from being bullet points instead for the sake of visual clarity. Something like:

[Depending on the context, certain actions could have multiple behavior types:

• GRAPPLE versus a smaller or reaction-based character = Interfere behavior type due to inflicting IMMOBILIZED and/or denying reactions.

• GRAPPLE to pull a character off of a Control Zone or away from a vulnerable ally = Assist behavior type.]

Pg9:

"additional weapons or systems, so it instead [chooses] to Interfere or Assist" (The "chose" is past tense while the rest of the paragraph is in present tense.);

"Also[,] if you end up"

"Due to having no Heat or unloaded Weapons[,] which gives it no reason to Stabilize, [remove "so"] it converts [optional: switch "it" with "this"] to a Full Assist"

"Since it would not be able to get in range for an attack even with move + boost, [Remove "so"] it converts"


*the rest is still TBR, I had to go do something, but I wanted to get down what I noticed.

**I hope this comes across as helpful/useful and not fussy/critical, because I really appreciate what you've put together here, and the time and effort already put into it. I just saw you'd already made changes for typos in your log and thought you might be open to another pass? I've never commented on anything like this before: I'm not sure about the etiquette here, so please forgive me if this was unsolicited and unwanted.

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Glad to hear you are enjoying the solo supplement.


Also, thank you so much for pointing out those typos. I'll admit that am not the best at searching my own writing for grammar issues or typos. Currently working on resolving the typos you mentioned and trying to find more in the writing.


Right now I am figuring out what else to add to the supplement, but am not sure what else to add to it or if it even needs more content at all.