DEMOOOO ITS OUT ITS OUT IRS OUT ITS OUT WE WONNNNNNN
WHAT WHAT WHAT DO YOU MEAN THIS IS THE DEMO ITS TOO SHORT TO BE A DEMO SIUHSIUHSIHS
OKAYS anyways as you can see I really REALLY enjoyed it :D Hear me out on that one full render of Deme…SHE LOOKS SO COOL PLEASE DRAW MORE OF HER LIKE THAT WONDERFUL AUTHOR/PROGRAMMER/ARTIST/ALL THE ABOVE
I really like how the mannequins seems to be like the personification of Dia’s thoughts, which is like subtle foreshadowing to how it’s a dream all along. I also find it really interesting at how the “You” (which is like us) calls Dream Dia “Him” (Speaking of Dia isn’t that a girl’s name lmao?) which I like GAH THAT’S SUCH AN INTERESTING AND COOL WAY TO SHOW LOW SELF WORTH. ESPECIALLY IN A DREAM WHERE LIKE YOU’RE SUPPOSED TO BE THE MAIN CHARACTER.
“You’re impossible” “I guess I am”
that just further support what I said gosh Dia you’re a loserrrrrrr lelelele I wonder how you will expand his character if you release the full game :D
Lune’s character is also just as interesting she has that mysterious aura to her. I find it funny how she randomly learned perfect English by just watching the news like CNA can’t be THAT educational bud 🙏🙏🙏 Her uh “death” like killed me too bro I WAS ENJOYING THE TRANQUIL MUSIC AND YOU KILLED HER DIJNHDIUHS Speaking of her death did she die via suicide or an accident or is it ambiguous? Because it’s like so beautiful there are many ways to interpret the scene. If it’s suicide it’s like “one last dance” under the moon. If it’s an accident it shows how she was robbed of her life, a metaphor to how she’s overshadowed by others in her life, making that life not rlly hers idk but it’s cool :> I can tell the Moon is gonna be like a big symbol in the story I mean it literally appeared twice in two major ish scenes not complaining I LOVE MOON SYMBOLISM
One thing you can improve is the pacing!! Personally, that side character boy (idk his name I can’t remember names to save lives) doesn’t need allat description for an introduction. I’ll admit it was a bit boring to read that segment (at least for me it felt too long) Maybe you can try to cut it down in future chapters or show a character’s personality through their outfits or smt!!! Also, maybe you could uh change the name of the name cause currently it seems like you just bashed the two MCs name tgt unless there’s a hidden meaning behind that hmmmmm,,,Maybe you could use diluendo (a musical term meaning "dying away") cause it sorta sounds like the current title and is kinda matching to your themes (just suggestions you don’t need to follow them)!! Other than that it’s generally fine ^v^
I can’t wait to see the full game release (if you do decide to do it PLEASE DO) and I wish you the greatest luck!! Yours truly, fingernails :3