I think the two things that jump out at me are mixing and intentionality. I think the mix would benefit by turning the bass down a bit so the percussion can be heard a bit easier. I like the dissonances and how it feels the the instruments aren't completely lined up to our intentions all the time, but it does feel the dissonances are unintentional at times. I think maybe a continuous alternation between the opening dissonant lines and the higher line and bass that are less dissonant would help keep the track fresh. Good work on this!