I hope the next update fix the english grammar errors, i love the whole story, but reading, surveved, lauhter and other ones that i forget, makes it look like the person didnt even checked before releasing.
I have some opinions about the story itself, its good obviously, but one thing make me feel that the dialogue with the characters were a bit.... rushed, and frankly, it doesnt look good.
The conversation between Trey and Arlen could it be more... Emotional. I mean, I think Arlen was VERY selfish at that moment, i know you want to be free, but seeing your friend suddenly discovering that his dad may or may not be dead and his friend inviting them to travel the world with a bare minimum of chances of surviving.... I dont think all of their conversation should be this superficial
Btw, cant wait for the chapter 1! I really love the characters and their dynamics, i'm so excited to see more of them.