Just want to give praise where praise is due and what is now only 1 Critique:
Praise:
Simply your dark moments are wonderfully dark and your light funny moments are really fun.
Even for how little we see Lillith had me feeling like I, myself, wanted to leave that situation. She was written so... menacingly, I loved it.
The slapstick and sit comedy are top tier. The girls getting stuck before the swimming competition had me laughing way too hard. Peak!
So far every character has been enjoyable. The heavy moments are written really well and the mc has a wonderfully relatable attitude.
How he handles Neeta is amazing and you even had the option to ask her about her quirkiness without prejudice. Perfect.
I really appreciated how his relationship with Cadence got brought up at the party. I was hoping for that to happen at some point. I was wondering when or even if this was going to happen and it made me really happy that it was handled perfectly.
Critique time:
The "Substance" use by the boys at the party was not what i would personally consider comedy. Them going to sleep at the party was a good use of situational comedy but there are better ways for them to wake up that would have been significantly more classy and comical. Such as having Miya scolding them or promising to sweet talk a woman of their choosing at the party only to not do so later, since they fell asleep. Doing lines... not really funny and HIGHLY out of place for the scene.
On the flip side if you really want to keep that their wake up method then have a room in the mansion where people WERE doing lines and they quickly ran there to do some to wake up. That would have been more appropriate for the venue that they are in. During a party like THAT I can't see anyone overlooking that kind of drug use. Had this scene taken place during a frat party this wouldn't feel so out of place.
All your other comedy felt like it was appropriate for the place and made sense for scenes they were in.
Conclusion:
I really like the story you have going. Your use of Sit-com and Slapstick are PEAK. Your use of word play is really top notch. The "Developer" moments are handled really well. I really enjoyed what you have so far as a whole. My critique is my ONLY real critique of what you have made. Keep up the good work.