the game looks great i love the choice of font and color along with the images. it really makes me feel immersed in the world. that said some of the text colors in dialogue could be a little heard to read. aside from maybe needing general proofreading you have a problem with not putting quotation marks and only inconsistently doing paragraph breaks at the end of dialogue. otherwise i think the story and writing are great and i like how much detail you added from the previous version. I wish you'd made it a bit harder though. I love the opening and i love what you've added to it, its a great way to set up the stakes and draw the player in immediately.