I often visualize what I read, When I read it and I really think that the chapter 3 really shows how you are able to paint a picture.
This can become a very cool IF given enough time and I'm sure youll do it. I also liked that there are only two mc's. Often times the world gets too crowded and difficult even for the author to keep track of, I like the simplicity with the mix of complex choices. Please take your time and keep moving ahead.
Take Care.