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Hey there, I have hunted down another slate of typos, mostly from Chapter 2 this time. Slowed down since the last one, but I managed. I will get to Chapter 3 eventually ™. Also, meant to do it earlier but I must regretfully inform you that you indeed used Gyatt properly in the Feraligatr scene title. 

Prologue - Forgot to share with the Chapter 1 comment, whoops.

1. In the introduction page, the word this should probably be it in "this would be disastrous if anything should happen to them." The same page also has the line "wuper strength birth control," although I feel like that could be turned into a joke somehow
2. Before the combat tutorial, there's an awkward "seem to" in " you seem to remember seeing these used." Not strictly incorrect grammar, but just removing it flows better.

Chapter 2

Fishing

1. In the fishing intro, here has morphed into her in "Anyway, we had a bit of a scare around her thanks to that Team Rocket"
2. In the Poliwhirl scene, I believe the word let is missing an s in "as if she's putting you in a trance that let her take the lead". In another line, my is the wrong word. "you use her to sate my own desires,"
3. The words jam and a are fused in the Seaking scene. "The Seaking jumps and coughs up some bubbles as you jama couple"
4. On the normal Magikarp mouth scene awesome is mispelled in "although that would make an awsome story!" In addition, since this is just one Magikarp it should be starts instead of start in "The Magikarp finally start to thrash"
5. On the normal Magikarp ass scene, keep has an s tacked on in "as you keeps treating her like". I also believe mumble is in the wrong form in the line "each mumbles moan brings another bubble"
6. During the Shiny Magikarp pussy scene, there's a line that has a couple oddities nearby each other. It's "she's still dripping from the lake but the golden scale on her lower lips really make is shine". I can kind of imagine the scale being singular, but I assume the word is at the end should be something different for sure. I also think stretched should be stetches in "the trail of drool left hanging between your lips and hers is broken by her golden belly as it stretched out over her beautiful face"
7. In the Shiny Magikarp ass scene, I think a word is missing in "as you place your hands on the grass either side of her shoulders". The "each mumbles moan" typo from the normal version is also retained.
8. The word on is missing in the Seadra scene in the line "her soft thighs quiver either side of your head"

Legends

1. If you select Wings during Lugia's first exploration option, leaves is in the wrong form in "It predictably doesn't and leave you feeling embarrassed." 
2. There's a couple possible typos during Lugia's fight that I found. First, if Lugia uses Dragon Rush and you dodge with Double Team, takes is in the wrong form in " but it still take only a little effort". Second, there's an in that should be is when she tries to use Sky Attack. "whatever she's planning in going to be big!"
3. In Lugia's version of the downtime, the word "your" is incomplete in "Lugia grins and Ho-Oh flinches as you cock". The same happens later in "she keeps pushing backwards until every inch of you immense dick". This happens a third time during the line "her colossal ass slamming against you as you colossal cock slides". I believe the word "she" is missing in "Lugia chuckles as leans back"
4. Before Ho-oh's quiz, days should be plural in "there seem to be a lot of them up here these day." The same happens with her feathers in "Ho-Oh sighs as her feather ignite,"
5. In Ho-oh's first question, who's should be whose in "So tell me, who's bones are still a mystery?"
6. When breeding Ho-oh, the word your is incomplete in "and let you cum start trickling out"
7. After breeding Ho-oh, the word than was distorted in "You Humans are cleverer that I gave you credit for."
8. In Ho-oh's version of downtime, I think one or two of Lugia's lines are missing their color. "It's not that, it's just... is Rapidash really big enough?". The line directly after that may also be Lugia, but it works pretty well being the MC. I also think that the word "sends" should probably be "sets" in "screams loud enough to shake the windows when it sends her wing-hand on fire." Following this, the word "as" is in a place where the word "are" belongs in "Your hands and crotch as both completely aflame"
9. The first choice on the way to Celebi, choosing the Climbing Gear has the same typo it did with Mewtwo since the line "you practically hop and skip your to the tunnel" needs the word way.
10. During the Celebi breeding scene, then is missing an n in "shouldn't push her too far, the again the right shape"
11. In the Celebi Pussy scene, I think the word more is missing in "it looks almost like some kind of weapon than it does a dick." I also think wonder should be wondering in "Future you is probably wonder where I got to".
12. In the Celebi mouth scene, there is an extra she in " she gulps and swallows as she her stomach swells larger and larger."
13. Suicune's breeding scene has a missing word in "Suicune keeps slamming her ass into with absolute delight". Many options which one it could be, simplest is you.
14. After breeding Raikou, your is incomplete in "she hasn't cleaned you cum off of her thighs yet."
15. Just before meeting Entei, the word they is incomplete in "A whole flurry of Unown fly past you, the pile on top of one another"
16. While breeding Entei, I think the following sentence would flow better if "be riding" was just ride. "Oh that feels good, I'd have you on your back and be riding you into the dirt..."
17. In Entei's version of the downtime scene the word grow is mispelled once in "Raikou and Suicune sit on the sides of the bed as you gorw".
18. In the Mewtwo Kimono scene, the word finishes is in the wrong tense in "The Tea-House employee finishing measuring". The word soon is also mispelled in "I'll return son with your tea."

Humans

1. The word if is doubled in the initial Jasmine scene. Is the first one intended to be the word even? "you knew she wouldn't be able to resist watching you, if if it's not an ass you're pounding!" There's also an "it" that should probably be another word and an incomplete "here" in "I thought it was just coming up her to check on Amphy today..."
2. In Jasmine's repeat pussy scene, the word pleasure should probably be pleasured or pleasureful in "You grin at the sounds of Lugia's sorrowful groan and Jasmine's pleasure moan"
3. During Jasmine's mouth scene, the word "seem" is incomplete in "but that doesn't see to be stopping her". The word once is mispelled in "Lugia is one again doing a terrible job "
4. In Jasmine's anal scene, the word "who" needs to be "who's" in "you feel like of the three people here right now, you're the one who enjoying this the least"
5. In Clair's initial scene the second "that" should be "than" in "that her Dragons will be more amazing that a Legendary Bird". The word toll has also snuck in when it's meant to be toss. "You toll the Ball". There is also a doubled with in "as she keeps spasming with with pleasure, "
6. Clair's butt scene has an "is" that should be "it" in "her belly rapidly bloats out beneath her until is starts"
7. In Janine's initial scene, I think the word you is needed after the comma in "Janine vanishes into the trees with one expert leap, ask Celebi if". There's also an extra t in "your balls start tot throb."
8. In the initial Lyra scene, the word her is incomplete and until is mispelled in "she moans with delight as he stretched stomach swells, bloating outwards util the weight is too much"
9. Lyra's mouth scene has a "there" turn into a "they" in "There are as many different kinds of dick as they are different kinds of Pokemon!"
10. In Lyra's ass scene, there's an accidental apostrophe in "OOOooohhh I never want this to end!' "
11. The Karen pussy scene has the word as doubled up in "you get close enough to reach around and grab her juicy as as". That one's probably meant to be ass. The word against is also mispelled in "you feel her hands rubbing agaunst"
12. Whitney's mouth scene has an accidental "as" when it should be "at" in "she glares as you as she wipes cum from her lips."
13. Whitney's pussy scene needs "she" to become "she's" in "the fact that her body is spasming and she moaning through"
14. Whitney's outro that is shared between scenes has a missing word in "You how many times you can fuck Whitney before she gives up the act". The word "you" should also be capitalized in "Maybe I should let Miltank out? you might actually be able"
15. Other Sides
16. In the Silver scene, I believe the word "that" should be as in "it looks more or less the same that it did when you were last here"
17. During the Feraligatr scene the word starts is in the wrong tense in "a low rumbling sound start building inside her,"
18. In the Tyranitar scene, foot is mispelled in "Tyranitar stomps her foor hard". Starts is also in the wrong tense in "and your cum start pouring out of her,"

Ship

1.  In the ship intro of Chapter 2, the word "to" is missing before mention in "how comfy they are, not mention being easy to wear!"
2. In The Giver of Life scene, "leaves" is in the wrong tense in "Sorry Master, that story always leave me quite emotional."
3. In the Queen of the Birds scene, there is an "is" that should be an "it" in "her huge pregnant belly is visible from behind as is sticks out either side of her". The wrong fourth is also used in "Lugia is forth"
4. Celebi's A.W.C. scene has an "and" that should be "an" in "maybe you'll become and Anal WhoreTM"